07-19-2013, 10:34 PM
A first note is that you tend to use wrong cases in your Latin. I know it is something that English speakers are not familiar with, but you have to correct them. Although I do not know Latin apart from the very basics, I am fairly sure (and others like Jass can of course speak with more certainty) that it should be :
1. legio (instead of leigo, this is a simple oversight surely)
2. Legio I Adiutrix (instead of Adiutricis)
3. Tribunus (instead of tribunis)
Some capitalizations are also unnecessary or wrong.
As a general remark, I think you should try to make a much clearer point. What is it you want to do in the article? Do you want to give an account of the situation as is presented in the said work and nothing more? Do you want to compare the situation presented with what modern authors have claimed for the situation to have been? Do you want to add to a certain argument? Challenge one? Propose your own? I also would personally like to see more modern sources.
1. legio (instead of leigo, this is a simple oversight surely)
2. Legio I Adiutrix (instead of Adiutricis)
3. Tribunus (instead of tribunis)
Some capitalizations are also unnecessary or wrong.
As a general remark, I think you should try to make a much clearer point. What is it you want to do in the article? Do you want to give an account of the situation as is presented in the said work and nothing more? Do you want to compare the situation presented with what modern authors have claimed for the situation to have been? Do you want to add to a certain argument? Challenge one? Propose your own? I also would personally like to see more modern sources.
